Title: Veiled [A Vampire Romance Thriller 1]
Author: Victoria Knight
Genre: New Adult, Romance, Thriller, Paranormal
Rating: 3 Stars
Until now Saul relied on the solitude of the forest to hide his true nature from prying eyes. But now a nameless evil has arrived, shaking his world to the foundation. With a trail of death leading right to his doorstep, he must join forces with the most unlikely of allies to save not only his existence, but also the lives of those he holds most dear…
WARNING – SPOILERS MAY ENSUE BEYOND THIS POINT – REVIEW BELOW
This book was a bit of a mixed-bag for me. There were certain aspects of the story that were done really well, and some that made me sit back and question what I was reading. For the most part, the grammar and style of the narrative was both clear and engaging. I felt sucked into the book right away, and I didn’t find myself stumbling over the narrative. In that respect, the book had a lot going for it. Unfortunately, it was also pocked with more than a few missing and misspelled words. They weren’t horrendous, but in the later half of the book some of the errors changed the entire meaning of the sentence—and it did become a bit of a distraction. For a book that seemed so well put together otherwise, it was a bit baffling to run across so many typos that should have been cleaned up early on by a decent editor.
That aside, the cover was well put together, the story was engaging, and I genuinely liked the characters for the most part. Saul was probably my favorite of the group. He seemed to have a good head on his shoulders most of the time, and he came across as a bit aloof without being too broody. It was interesting to see how he handled his relationships with other characters in the story—particularly those that were perhaps weaker at their core than he was. Nikki too was a decent character (minus a few decisions that had me questioning her IQ) and I liked her for the most part. It was great to see her character develop in the later half of the book.
That doesn’t mean I liked all the characters though. Benali drove me up the wall. Here’s this…. specter who is part of the infamous Guard, but he didn’t come off as menacing or scary in any way. He was almost too friendly and familiar with Saul, and it made him sound a little bit like a cartoon character. He was all drama and over-talking, and very little of what he was purported to be: a frightening thing apart of a council bent on keeping the vampire laws.
Another character I wasn’t particularly fond of was Kara, the temporary sheriff. Her involvement with the whole plot seemed superfluous. She met Saul once, and then spent the entire rest of the book constantly talking about the fact that she needed to get laid. She was irrationally jealous of Nikki for no foreseeable reason, and was practically stalking Saul. It almost felt as if the author was trying to allude to some sort of mystical draw that Saul had over her, but it never went anywhere in the plot. Instead, I literally lost count of the number of times Kara lamented over having no man in her life. Sure, she stepped up in the end and helped to defend everyone…but for the most part, she didn’t seem to be present for any particular reason. The thriller aspect of the book, the part meant to have Kara as an integral part of story was overshadowed by Nikki and Saul—who basically figured out the entire mess long before Kara did.
There were some minor issues with the narrative aside from the characters though—such as the fact that some of the decisions made concerning the narrative made no sense. They were usually relatively small things, but they did make me pause. Some of these were things like: Nikki saying the only drug she’d ever taken was Vicodin that a doctor had prescribed her for a broken finger. News flash… as someone who recently broke a finger. They don’t give Vicodin out for that—it’s way too strong for the situation. Also: Nikki saying that she views her relationship with Jason as platonic, and then just a few lines later she is wondering what he’d be like in bed. Another time one of the chapters ended with the character waking up from a nightmare, screaming. The next chapter went back in time before she woke up and continued on the story from there. The next chapter continued on further into the story, and eventually it got back to the point where the character woke up…. but she didn’t scream. Her entire reaction had changed. It almost felt as if the author had meant to delete the ending of that chapter to write it out in full in the next two chapters… but forgot to actually do the deleting part. In the same area of the story, Saul manages to make the unconscious and feverish Nikki swallow medication. I scratched my head at that one. How on earth did he get her to swallow the pills? Then, she wakes up a little while later and comments on her fever. but how did she know she was feverish? She’d been unconscious for days.
These were all little things in and of themselves, but they were distracting after awhile. Overall, the book was all right. I got sucked in, and I wanted to continue reading. I enjoyed the romance between Saul and Nikki (despite the fact that she was 19 and he looked around 40 and was actually over 100 years old). Okay, it was a bit pervy the way he passed over the adult cop for a pushy young-adult—let’s be honest. Still, I enjoyed the story, and certain aspects of it were really well done. On the other hand, it had a lot of problems—most of which could have been picked up on by a good editor. It was a shame to see so many obvious errors, and it did make the novel seem a bit more juvenile than I think was intended. This was a mixed bag. I’m glad I read it, and I’d feel comfortable recommending it to anyone who enjoys new adult paranormal fiction—but it certainly wasn’t genre breaking. It felt almost like a YA novel had been given a dose of sex to push it over into the New Adult category. It was okay.